Day 3: 獨家詳細分析Sample Essay 及 Task 2 寫作詞彙筆記簡介 – ILETS Academic Writing Task 2 10-Day Planner

 

 第三天,我們來做一個回顧,鞏固一下之前學習的內容。

我們先看看看這個問題:

Many people fail to achieve a balance between work and the other parts of life. What causes the situation? How to overcome this problem?

Sample Essay

[1] Nowadays, it is common to see that a lot of people cannot strike a balance between work and their other parts of life, for example, their studies and family time. While it is doubtless that these people are responsible for their behaviour, the stressful modern work environment contributes to such a phenomenon as well. It is believed that two approaches can be adopted to tackle the situation.

[2] To begin with, the failure to achieve a balance stems from people’s lack of time management skills. They do not know the importance of prioritizing their work properly. Some people, if not all, overestimate their ability to juggle between their career and their private lives—they want the best of both worlds. However, as time goes on, some of them find too difficult to spend more time with their families, or perform well in their part-time studies while enjoying a successful career.

[3] Besides individual’s failure to set priorities properly, the modern working environment also discourages people from striking a balance between their work and private lives. Most large corporations are notorious for their long working hours. Employers demand the best from their employees. It is not uncommon to see a lot of people work around the clock, especially well-paid professionals like lawyers. Despite the high salary, these employees sacrifice their private lives, as they seldom have time for their families, let alone entertainment and relaxation.

[4] To enable more people to strike a balance between their work and private lives, both individuals and the government have a part to play. It goes without saying that people need to have better time management skills, they need to prioritize their work properly. They should work efficiently so that they can devote more time to their private lives. Moreover, it is recommended that the government should set up standard working hours so that employees can achieve a better work-life balance, reduce their level of stress and foster social harmony. (322 words)

這篇範文的主題就是和平衡工作和生活有關的。在第一段,範文指出了很多人難以平衡工作和生活的關係,即是 ‘a lot of people cannot strike a balance between work and their other parts of life’。  至於是什麼原因造成這種現象,因為是第一段,所以只需簡單提一下相關資訊就可以了。

在第二段,範文給出了第一個原因,即缺乏時間管理技能‘ lack of time management skills’。比如他們不知道合理安排工作優先次序的重要性,即是‘They do not know the importance of prioritizing their work properly.’;以及高估了他們處理工作和生活關係的能力‘overestimate their ability to juggle between their career and their private lives’。

在第三段,範圍給出了第二個原因—現代的工作環境,‘the modern working environment’。文中提到了經常加班導致個人私人生活時間會減少的案例,即是 ‘these employees sacrifice their private lives, as they seldom have time for their families’。這裏範文運用到了我們之前學的個人社會框架。「缺乏時間管理技能」是屬於個人的行為,而「現在的工作環境」就是社會方面的原因。這也就是哲學上的辯證關係,任何事情的發生都有內因和外因。

最後一段,也就是在第四段,範文給出瞭解決問題的兩個方案。兩個解決方案,當然也是從個人和社會兩個角度去思考的。比如個人能做到的就是,提升自己的時間管理技能,然後正確地安排自己的工作,即是 ‘It goes without saying that people need to have better time management skills, they need to prioritize their work properly.’;而社會方面,就是建議政府建立標準的工作時間,即是‘the government should set up standard working hours’。在這裏,個人認為應該是建立標準的加班時間,如每天加班不能超過多少小時,每週加班不能超過多少小時等。

範文沒有第五段了,因為每篇文章對於字數都有一定的要求,比如說300字左右。所以,如果你們的文章,在寫原因的時候已經用了較大的篇幅,那麼這時候問題的解決方案就要寫的簡要一些,然後兩個解決方案都寫在同一個段落。這篇範文就是這樣處理的,把兩個解決方案都放到了最後一段來寫。

在此,也提醒大家,一定要嚴格把握好每個段落的字數。如果寫完兩個原因就佔用了差不多300字,那麼就沒有其他空間來給出你的解決方案了。結果就是,你的文章就不是完整的,得分就不會很高。

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