Day 6 : Letters to the Local Council – IELTS General Writing Task 1 10-Day Planner

Letters to the Local Council 是Letter of Request (請求信)其中一種。出題方式是要求考生以居民的身分,分析他們Local Council 的方案,而且請求Local Council 撤回方案,例如撤回關閉兒童遊樂場方案。我們看看以下題目:

Write a letter to the local council about the proposed closure of a playground in your area because children dont use it much.

In your letter say

Why dont many children use it?

How is the playground important for children?

Give some suggestions how to increase the playgrounds usage.

Sample Essay

Dear Sir,

I am writing to express my concern regarding the proposed closure of a playground in my neighborhood. I hope the council can reconsider its decision.

The playground plays an important role in children’s development. Parks are great places for children to interact with their friends and parents.

Unfortunately some of the park facilities have been worn-out. Worse still, the council cannot afford to employ sufficient manpower to clean the park.This certainly discourages parents from bringing their children to the park.

To tackle the situation, I would like to put forward three suggestions. To begin with, the council should ask for more funding from the government, so that it can employ more staff to clean the park. The fund can also be used to renovate old facilities and build new ones such as a new roller skating rink. The council can consider promoting the renovated park through affordable means. I suggest promoting the park through social media, such as setting up a Facebook page and an Instagram account.

I hope the Council can consider my suggestions and revitalize the park.

Yours sincerely,

Chris Wong

範文分析:

在第一段,作者直接說出了寫信的目的,”I am writing to express my concern regarding the proposed closure of a playground in my neighborhood”, “我寫這封信是為了表達我對提議關閉我家附近一個遊樂場的擔憂”。

在第二段,作者肯定了遊樂場的重要性,因為”Parks are great places for children to interact with their friends and parents”, 公園是孩子們與朋友和父母交流的好地方。

在第三段,作者說出了為什麼沒有很多孩子使用公園的兩個原因,第一個原因是”some of the park facilities have been worn-out”, 公園的一些設施已經破舊不堪;第二個原因是”the council cannot afford to employ sufficient manpower to clean the park”, 議會沒有足夠的人力來清理公園。結果就是,父母不願意帶孩子去公園了。

在第四段,作者給地方議會提了三點建議,一是”the council should ask for more funding from the government, so that it can employ more staff to clean the park”, 地方議會應該向政府尋求更多的資金,以便可以雇傭更多的工作人員來清理公園;二是”renovate old facilities and build new ones such as a new roller skating rink”, 翻新舊的公園設施和建造新的設施,比如新的輪滑溜冰場;三是”promoting the (renovated) park through social media, such as setting up a Facebook page and an Instagram account”, 通過社交媒體推廣改造後的公園,比如建立一個Facebook頁面和一個Instagram帳戶。

最後一段,作者希望地方議會可以考慮他的建議並重振公園。

這篇範文的不足之處是,在第二段只用一句話來描述遊樂場的重要性,如果能再說出遊樂場另一個重要的點就更好了。第三段和第四段都寫的不錯,尤其是第四段寫的建議確實可以有針對性地解決了第三段中提到的問題。整體上說,這是一篇不錯的範文。

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